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Abby D. Jones's avatar

Another good one. Sad, gripping, relatable. I liked the explanation of the name, Deadwater. It was easy to picture and feel.

The Sauna Writer's avatar

Yeah, you deliver, every time. And an upbeat end amidst all the gloom; I wonder if it comes with a price.

Might be due to the format, but his relationship to Nora feels a little… thin? Like we’ve heard bits about her for three “chapters” but this is the first time you’ve actually lingered longer on his grief. Good for depth, but a little lukewarm still. Maybe that changes later…

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